Add your own Chapters, paths, and ideas in here (https://chyoa.com/story/The-Sissy-Training-School.13842) and I will add them to the Story in here and add Pictures and maybe we could create a great Story full of possibilities!
The main Story is about a regular boy getting kidnapped and forced to enter a special school.
Everything is in a very early stage.
I'm not native English speaking so don't be too rude.
Thx to everyone for the positive feedback :) motivates me to do more of it and to improve the story!
0.3.10 New Sissy Maid Content :)
0.3.11 New Day added :)
0.3.12 New Content and design Changes
0.3.13 New Content :)
0.3.13.1 Some people couldn't open the zip file I hope it's fixed now
0.3.14 New Content
0.3.14.1 Minor fix of the play online option
0.4 Almost added all pictures to the play online Options. It's almost identical to the offline version. I just have to add the pictures in the side bar.
0.4.1 All Pictures Added. The Online Version is now completed.
0.4.2 fixed the gif issue
0.4.3 New Custom images :)
0.4.4 New Content
0.4.4.1 Finished the Chapter
0.4.6 New Content and Art
More Content coming soon :)
Feels very scatterbrained, as if the creator tried to cram too many ideas in too quickly. There's no logical progression, the choices don't actually matter, things come out of nowhere and aren't very well justified. It's a confused mess with no actual gameplay. That's a shame, because it's not bad for what it is, but what it is isn't good.
A very small update around this time and a few minor lines of dialogue so far. Even though so far its not CYOA I don't mind. I just wish the author will take a few months to work on a major update than just giving us these tiny updates that dont push the story. Atleast take 3 months before teasing us again.
Just a quick review.
- Development of the game (how fast etc.)
- Almost everything, very linear, walls of text, its not even CYOA, just click next->click next->click next->end type of game
I'd really like the creator to just actually review the content they've already added and then actually take their time and update it over the course of a good month instead of every couple of days because there are no insignifcant or worthwhile updates at all. I feel sorry for the people who pay money for this. You're legitmately getting scammed. It feels like it's been written by a five year old.
This game has the potential to be very good if the author would take their time and quit rushing out updates and spend more of their time actually polishing what is there. I know I am liable to be tied to the stake and burned for that comment because many here need their FAP bank emptied on a regular basis but here me out.
In the beginning of this project there was what seemed to be a bit of structure and care put into the game on release but since then it's just become a "look at this" mess almost as if the author is priding themselves on quantity not quality. The story jumps huge arcs of time and there is no elaboration or explanation in detail of events, your left with a dry and poorly thought of explanation of events and left with your own imagination to fill in the blanks where the author clearly could have done a better job. Also as of late the writing has begun to fall off and the author is relying more upon images and GIF images to tell their story instead of investing themselves into it. There's just so much more this story could be if the author would pay attention to details, go into detail about how the MC feels about being exposed to a certain situation instead of offering a sentence to it and then moving on or having to be made to do something ex:wearing a butt plug or chastity device, when the MC crosses that plain where it was once forced but now is slightly being enjoyed use that as the opportunity to build upon your story and draw your readers in instead of dropping the ball for whatever reason and passing on the opportunity. Have a little foreplay with your readers don't just dive right in and attempt to go for the goal because you come up empty the majority of the time. Being in the position of a submissive being dominated, emasculation, shrinking penis size, feminization must be a personal fetishes or kink of yours or otherwise you wouldn't have invested the time to build a story around it. I think the problem your having is you think of ideas on the fly and depend on your memory when you attempt to type them out but it doesn't come out as effective as the original thought you had, I'd suggest carrying a notebook and writing down those thoughts as they come to you so when you type them out there effectiveness isn't lost in translation to your memory trying to resurrect that same hot feeling you had when you initially thought of it. No shame or judgement will be passed upon to you if those thoughts happen to be darker or too real than some here are willing to deal with.
Again this game has potential but it's up to the author whether or not it reaches it. My suggestion would be to reach out to a native English speaker and ask for proof reads and maybe help with constructing a more believable and cohesive story. This is all meant as constructive criticism and in no way am I trying to bad mouth the author or their work, I'm just pointing out the flaws that I see. 5 and a half out of 10 as it stands.