From the game page Review
Review by Tyamor666
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Version reviewed: 0.1.0.0 on Fri Jan 06, 2017 1:07 am
I understand that creating a game is a lot of hard work, and I understand that you're starting start to learn how to use twine, but for God's sake man, don't just slap together some text and call it a game. Here's a list of your sins:
Thank you for taking some time and posting a review, negative reviews are just as valuable if not more so than positive ones as long as they are mean spirited.
-The grammer in this game is horrible, downright painful, and the spelling is middle school-tier at best. If you're not sure how to spell a word, google it. Don't just guess.
I am sorry I totally own this, I used 2 tools and one doesn't have spellcheck. As for spelling well lets just say I have a pretty bad case of dyslexia and even googling can leave me stumped. As for the Grammar I am working on it and I am sorry it is so bad for you.
-There's a total of I think two pictures in this game, one of a messy room, and one of a family from what looks like the 30's. The first photo is used well, and helps convey a sense of location. The second is meaningless.
I assume you mean the one in the hallway, right now it doesn't have a lot of meaning but as more of the TF content comes into play the images in the hallway will matter more. I guess you could say it may be a bit premature.
-If you're going to upload a game to a websit called TFGamesSite, at least have a single TF in your game.
There is TF in the game right now it is not complete I am hoping to have the first TF check in for the player to notice this week. Look at the stats in game to see some changes (debugging stats are shown right now).
-You're not going to get sued for using "YouTube" in a game. You don't have to use "UTube"
I am not willing to take the chance, and since its my potential butt on the line I would prefer not to have it be a worry.
-Oh actually I was wrong, there's more than two pics. There's four. The other two are memes.
At this time there are 5 images but yes 2 are memes.
-The player can do like, three things. Move to a few rooms, attempt to use a computer, and peek on your sister. Thats it.
Slightly more than that(but not a lot) but until the lust/horny engine is working there isn't a lot more extra I want to add in area wise as actions will be driven by the values in the engine.
So to sum it all up, get back to the drawing board, and don't post a game until it has at least some features. And for Christ's sake, use some spellcheck.
I am working on the next update now and will be posting it either tomorrow night or the night after that.
My interest is in getting the core out and getting feedback so I will know if I am heading in a direction that people like. If people like it then I will be motivated to work on it more.